tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-282020366528486756.post3573185906033315946..comments2023-06-29T08:11:13.196-07:00Comments on The Furious Cole Perry: An introductionBrandon Pedersenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17327456286114869358noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-282020366528486756.post-29967030031139442712008-01-28T12:09:00.000-08:002008-01-28T12:09:00.000-08:00The only thing I would say is that it might read b...The only thing I would say is that it might read better if you said: "Not Peterson and not Patterson. Pederson." or "Not Peterson, not Patterson, but Pederson." I know fragments can be effective, but it seems very broken up to make those 5 words into 3 sentences.Kylie Johttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08347055559083091197noreply@blogger.com